One day I was walking with my dog named Sally in the park. Then I saw a bear sitting on a bench. Me and my dog were frightened. We didn't know what to do. So I called animal control. It took them a while to get there Finally they got here but it was to hard to get him in so we called two more. So they were trying to lift him into the truck they got him in and drove away. So me and my continued our long walk in the park. I said to myself that was a crazy day. THE END
Mrs I, 100WC Team, New Zealand
2/28/2015 03:11:29 pm
Thank you for entering this week's 100 Word Challenge, Sami. Now that certainly is a crazy day for the characters. Imagine seeing a bear sitting on a bench! I like your sentence starter, 'finally', however you have used 'so' too many times. What other words could you use to make 'so' only appear once? Keep up with your writing and I hope to read another of your stories soon!
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