Arg. that was my five year old brother playing pirates. His favourite phrase was x marks the spot. He would always say that he was going to leave on a pirate ship one day. Last year there was a pirate ship at the local docks and the pirate said I want you as a pirate. That night the ship set sale for America. When I woke up I went to my brothers room and he was gone then I looked at the window it was open. No he couldn't. My brother had set sale to America gone, gone for ever.
Mr. Roche
4/23/2015 02:13:42 pm
Pirate ships tend not to simply pull up at a dock. They don't operate like regular ships. You worked the prompt in well this week but I don't think this is the best story you have come up with. Next week try to add in more descriptive words to help set an atmosphere and make it more exciting.
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