This is the most boring day ever. I wish something crazy happend. Suddenly I heard a loud ferocious noise. When I looked outside I saw a person grabbing on to a pole for his life but the ferocious wind blew the person into the air just like a peice of paper. Then suddenly the roof from the top of my house came of and then I got lifted in to the air by the stongest wind ever it was almost like someone was picking me up and playing around with just like some kind doll. But then I tried to......
Mrs Coulthard
5/24/2015 02:56:26 am
Come back, I wanted to reach out and grab the person to stop them from flying away in the ferocious wind. You will need to look at your sentence structure very carefully Umer. You have used many connective words in your sentences. To continue to improve your writing, you will need to look at commas and complex sentences.
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