It was a cold morning but playing in the woods is always fun. Are favorite game has to be hide and seek. There is so many great spots to hide. I have my own secret hiding spot. I’m playing a game of chasing with my brother and sister to warm ourselves up. Playing with mam and Dad was always the best but now they are divorced. I’m at my mams house know. “Dinners ready” , calls our mam.I run in but on the way I see a couch that was never there before. I sit on it. A few seconds later I disappear and end up in a very weird place. What is it?
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Alex
2/27/2015 05:42:46 am
very good Gareth :O
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Umer
2/27/2015 05:44:12 am
your story is really imaginetiv but there's one spelling mistake and good story
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gareth
2/27/2015 05:56:00 am
i know its imaginitive
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Michael Brady
2/27/2015 05:57:13 am
good but our instead of are in the second sentcene .
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Mr G, Sheffield, UK (Team 100WC)
2/27/2015 06:39:51 am
Looks like you've already received some helpful comments Gareth. I like the way your story begins by describing a fairly ordinary day, right up until the end, when zap! There's a disappearance! I wonder why that might have happened ... and who caused it? A magician? A witch? What do you think?
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