"X marks the spot" said the captain. "Dig it up you fools". "Yes" said the two servants. So the servants dug up the treasure. "Do we get any of the treasure" said the servants. "No you ignorant fools" said the captain. Later that night the servants had thought of a plan to steal the treasure. The plan was once they got the treasure they would sail away in the boat. The two servants made their way into the captain's hut. Then they got the Treasure and sailed away
Mr. Roche
4/23/2015 02:20:48 pm
It had a very promising start Michael but it really fades out towards the end. I really liked the way the captain spoke to his men - that sounded very real but the story needs work. The plan the two men come up isn't well thought out and you put in no descriptive words or no drama and you are well short of the 100 words. I'd like you to make a better effort next week.
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