It started when me and my family went on holidays to Spain it was a 2 and a half hour journey I fell asleep on the way it was at 10:30 am and we had to wake up at 4 in the morning so when we got there it was so sunny that we went on the bus that led to an adventure park it was so funny my ultimate adventure ever it was so fun I lined up to go on a waterslide I lined up I got on at last.
Mrs Davis Team 100
3/29/2015 05:06:02 am
Hi Daniel and thanks for entering the 100 WC this week. You've called it your worst adventure, but it ends in a lovely holiday, so I don't think it's all that bad! Perhaps if you wrote it again, you make it a little bit more dramatic in the middle, by having the coach delayed and not being sure whether you'd get there on time, just to add a bit of excitement. Well done and keep writing!
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