"Ahhh" said caption Jack." I want lots of work coming for you all. Bring me the map Fred "." Yes sir, I will do it. What does it say Fred?"." It said 'x marks the spot' and Kerry ,What does it mean?"." I could not tell you caption. Any of use, I am going to fire you or you can walk the plank just say something"." Ahh i think it means that the clue . You fool no it is walk the plank Bob. No sir please alright lets head of in this way to Kerry . Ok turn around different plan Mark. lets find some treasure.
Mr. Roche
4/23/2015 02:29:25 pm
Hi Daniel. Thanks for your story. It has a very good start and you worked in the prompt words very well. I think there is a little too much conversation near the end and it is hard to follow because of that. It would help if you started a new line every time a different character spoke. Good effort though, well done.
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